Take a look at the original sentence again:
The grip of the pantyhose, the stranglehold of the scarf, and the bite of
the tight shoes made Rachel want the interview to
end, she longed for a cotton T-shirt and
jeans.
You wanted to fix it this way:
The grip of the pantyhose, the stranglehold of the scarf, and the bite of
the tight shoes made Rachel want the interview to
end; however, she longed for a cotton T-shirt
and jeans.
One way to fix a comma splice is to use a semicolon and a conjunctive adverb like however. You must choose your conjunctive adverb with care, though. However is a contrast word, but the sentence above does not require a contrast transition.
You might want to consult the rules for fixing comma splices and fused sentences.
Go back to the sentence to try again.