Take a look at the original:

Alphonso does not care as much about comfort as he does about style he will wear, for example, a long sleeve shirt and a leather jacket in the middle of a Florida summer if they are the perfect complement to his new pair of khakis.

You wanted to fix it this way:

Alphonso does not care as much about comfort as he does about style, he will wear, for example, a long sleeve shirt and a leather jacket in the middle of a Florida summer if they are the perfect complement to his new pair of khakis.

To add a comma between style and he would cause an equally bad problem, a comma splice. A comma splice occurs when you have two complete sentences joined with a comma alone. Alphonso does not care as much about comfort as he does about style is the first complete sentence. He will wear, for example, a long sleeve shirt and a leather jacket ... begins the second complete sentence. The spot between style and he needs a stronger break than a comma alone.

You might want to consult the rules for fixing comma splices and fused sentences.

Go back to the sentence to try again.

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