Take a look at the original sentence again:

Bored with the lecture on comma splices and fused sentences, Jayson started poking Kim with the sharp tip of his pencil finally she whirled around and slugged him in the mouth.

You wanted to fix it this way:

Bored with the lecture on comma splices and fused sentences, Jayson started poking Kim with the sharp tip of his pencil, as a result she whirled around and slugged him in the mouth.

As a result is a transitional phrase. Unfortunately, you cannot use a comma and a transitional phrase to fix a fused sentence.

You might want to consult the rules for fixing comma splices and fused sentences.

Go back to the sentence to try again.

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